sábado, 15 de junio de 2019

"Shawn and Joaquin"

In Writing, we had to write a story about telling a lie, my story is about a girl that cheat her boyfriend with another boy, and start telling a lie.

This is my story:

          Crash! the ball hit a very beautiful man. We ran where he was and I told my boyfriend, Edward, to ask him if he was okey. The man turned around and looked directly to Martina´s, my friend, eyes. They immediatly fell in love,and he said "Hi, I´m Joaquin, what´s your name?" "Martina," she answered. "I´m okey, but my shoulder still hurts," Joaquin answered to Edward´s question. When Edward and I knew that he was okey we left, but Martina stood.

          Martina an Joaquin talked two hours about their feelings, but my friend never told him anything about her boyfriend. One day, Martina´s boyfriend saw them in the park, so he ran to where she was and he started shouting, "what are you doing with my girlfriend?" and Martina tried to calm her boyfriend down, "Shawn he is only my friend," she said, "that´s a lie, you have just answered you want to be my girlfriend." "no, I never said that." Martina answered. Shawn  went away. He was very angry, Joaquin did the same.


           In the end Martina ended  her relationship with both of them. She never saw Shawn again , but she continued talking with Joaquin. They were friends. Martina said sorry to him. He forgave her, but thy were just friends. Finally she reflected on what  had happened and she promised and she promised herself never to do that again.

THE END!



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1 comentario:

  1. Florencia,
    Very good work. Some corrections:
    -the past of hit is hit
    - you cheat ON someone
    -Re read before posting. There are some spelling mistakes, like "kwen", "Shwn" or "srry"
    - she reflected ON what had happened
    Mark: 9 (nine)

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